Nobody Likes A Rambler
By Liz Palmer
We all know people who ramble. They include every boring
and insignificant detail, speak in five-minute-long sentences and take
forever to get to the point. When they finally reach the end of their
story, most people have either walked away or lost interest.
If you were reading their words, would you read right
to the end? Or would you find something more informative, less boring
and shorter to read?
We all have a tendency to ramble. It´s natural.
And the more excited we are about a subject, the more likely we are
to ramble.
Unfortunately, if we ramble in writing, our readers
may not get to the good stuff. And if that good stuff
is your website, your byline or a product you wish to promote, your
rambling has just cost you money.
Now, I certainly don´t want to curb your excitement,
and I don´t even want to thwart your tendency to ramble.
Instead, I want you to get wildly excited about your
topic. I want you to ramble as much as you like. Then I want you to
edit.
When you edit, try to cut as many words from your article
as possible. The number of words cut depends on the length of your first
draft and the desired length of your finished article. That said, you
should usually try to cut your word count by at least 20 percent
and the more words cut, the better. If that leaves your article too
short, try rambling on for even longer before you get to the editing
stage.
I don´t have the room here to list everything
that helps cut down the words in your article, but I will share some
key points:
1. Identify your points and sub-points. When we ramble
we tend to go from one point, to another point, then back to the first
point, then to an unrelated sub-point. You get the picture. By identifying
points and sub-points you can structure your article and ensure each
point and sub-point is only addressed once.
2. Indicate the importance of each point and sub-point.
I like to use a highlighter for this. Pink for very important, yellow
for fairly important, and so on. When you run out of colors, ask yourself
if the material left is important enough to be included, or whether
it can be cut.
3. Get to the point. Ramblers take forever to get to
the point. First, they will tell you what they were wearing, what the
weather was like and why Cousin Sue happened to be there at the time.
If you´re taking a lot time to get to the point, cut the beginning
from your article. This goes for paragraphs, too.
4. Say what you want in the shortest possible way. You
all know the sentence about the quick brown fox. This sentence not only
uses every letter in the alphabet, but it says what it needs to with
as few words as possible. A rambler would write The fox, who was
very quick, and happened to be brown, ran up to and jumped over the
very lazy dog. I´m sure you´ll agree that the original
is much better.
These items won´t cover everything you need to
look at when reducing your word count, but they do provide a good starting
base. If you want to remember them, just think of the biggest rambler
you know and the things you would like to say to him: You already
said that. Is the weather important? Get to
the point. I have to go soon. Can we hurry this up?
Readers won´t wish they could say these things
to you. They´ll just find something else to read. Keep your word
count low and you´ll keep your readers with you right to the end.
Liz Palmer is a freelance copywriter and editor,
based in Australia. She works with businesses and writers, offering
a range of services from basic proofreading to detailed comments and
suggestions. How many errors are slipping through in your work? http://au.geocities.com/currency_lass
palmer19@austarmetro.com.au